Amazing...
Okay, let me start off by saying the first couple measures of your picking really reminded me of Flight of the Conchord's Foux De Fa Fa. Google it, you'll be pleasantly surprised and I think it will give you a laugh.
Okay, so wow, the guitars in this song are amazing. Simply put. You did an excellent job with the recording and I don't hear any muddyness at this point in time. One thing, though, is that I heard a pop at about 20 and then again at 56-57 secs in. It may have just been the player, but I thought I'd let you know.
I really like the progression you have going throughout the song - it really fits in with what you're trying to tell the listener. When you're hitting the back of your guitar it still sounds good, but I have to wonder if that's a roundback or just a regular acoustic.
Okay, I liked when the orchestra came in, but I didn't really like the timpani (I think that's what it is). Now I can see where you're getting your muddiness from. I think that with all the percussion you already have going, you can do without the timpani. It may have just been me but I thought it detracted from the piece.
I REALLY liked the piano interlude with the triangle/glockenspiel in there. It brought everything down a notch and gave an opening for an ending.
Dude, everytime this loops I can't help but laugh because think of the Flight of the Conchords video, seriously check that out lol.
In terms of what you were going for for the meaning of the song, I think you captured it brilliantly. I really, really dig this song and would love to work with you in the future on a song if you're up for it.
The quality you have hear really supports the story you tell and the mixing could be a bit better but I really like what you have. I think for me it's just the timpani holding it back but that's personal taste. I would just suggest for you to at least take another listen and see what you think.
All in all, this is an awesome song! This is set to place high in the competition, good luck!
~SinJim